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a random white american moves to california to work, has no racism or noticing at first but gradually notices how his co-workers get fired for absurd reasons and frequently replaced by non whites who act savagely and redpills the main character who eventually either gets fired or moves away again. and yes, the ceo is a kike with awful people running the job interviews.

don't really have much else planned at the moment but there will be a neat line of developing this as it goes along.

thoughts?
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Brannvesen on scored.co
1 year ago 4 points (+0 / -0 / +4Score on mirror ) 1 child
If done subtle enough, but with a good story people can relate to (i.e literally me character) it could be as successful as Falling down or even better as it's more on spot in these modern times.
Coronelington on scored.co
1 year ago 3 points (+0 / -0 / +3Score on mirror )
i am aware i cannot show my full power in the story. however it's loosely based around a pressuring job environment and how a collective group of people get nigger fatigue. it centers on a 20-something year old who is trying to earn his bread. also the job interviewer is an old man who drowns his sorrow in alcohol and has poor eyesight. again, the details are still a w.i.p

this will also be a practice of my artistry skills. it'll probably be a comic
PurestEvil on scored.co
1 year ago 1 point (+0 / -0 / +1Score on mirror ) 1 child
A bit too close to reality... and as so far it lacks an interesting plot line. Look:

> and redpills the main character who eventually either gets fired or moves away again

This is a boring outcome for a fictional story.

Your character needs to revolt, reject the system, stand up against it, face adversity. You want your character to assume heroic traits, even if he has to work to get it.

Maybe he was a good boy all his life, doing what he was told, learning what he should, ran through the system, did everything that was expected from him, from teachers, parents, corporations, and one day - boom, he gets fired, divorced, depersoned, have set an example of, all for doing something mundane.

But he is smart and able to recognize patterns, or has some other kind of gift or experience that makes him notice. Maybe he decides to sit down and write down the names of all people, as their faces flashback to him (photographic memory or just a good memory?) who did good and bad to him. And then he notices a pattern.

Then he looks into the television, into politics, news, various facts, and notices the same pattern again.

After that he contests his newly found theories, it can't be true, it *may* not be true, or otherwise he'd be a massive fool.

What happens later? Will he become the modern era Hitler? A serial killer? Whatever it is, something *interesting* must happen.

If necessary, in order to maximize your reach before the censorship, you could do a "they are among us" thing where they do not turn out to be jews, but "aliens" or whatever. It's an analogy, and those who know, know, those who don't, will eventually find out.
Coronelington on scored.co
1 year ago 2 points (+0 / -0 / +2Score on mirror ) 1 child
interesting, i'll look into adding something like that. again, nothing firm has been decided yet
Rebooted on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 ) 1 child
I think the healthiest and firmest "win" should be him meeting a good, young white woman and getting married. You can close out the story with the birth of his first child, a son. Huge whitepill for two people to both overcome the soul-crushing decline and looting of their civilization, refuse to give up, and bring forth new good life into the world.
Coronelington on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 )
massive whitepill indeed considering the troublesome family this particular guy would grow up in
KyleIsThisTall on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 )
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=5SvDr3FHM9A
Rebooted on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 ) 1 child
Pretty close to my story. I'd add a few scenes where multiple white neighbors move away to "be with family", "get closer to our church", or don't state any reason at all. Over the course of a few years, he sees the families in the park down the street go from young and white with a smattering of mix of black/hispanic... then suddenly shift to mostly muslim. (Actually happened to my neighborhood park a couple years ago during one of the "refugee" resettlement actions. Blacks and hispanics immediately stopped coming around. Some whites still go because it is in our neighborhood.)

You can include a scene where two mothers were trying to fly a kite in the park with their young daughters (6-7 years old). They get surrounded and harrassed by young muslim boys (maybe 10-13 years old) as they try to badger the mothers to give up the kite. (Actually happened to my wife and daughter with their friends.)

Also a scene where a muslim woman approaches a man and his wife asking for directions or something. The man kindly responds and the muslim starts shaking in fear, refusing to look at him or acknowledge his response. (Again, actually happened to me. Twice. They probably got beaten for having a man talk to them.)

If you want actual work related things: (Yes, there is a theme you probably noticed, we start from an already "diverse" cast. More on that later.) Guy and his hispanic coworker are working hard on projects and kicking ass. Work review time comes along and the black supervisor gives 3/5 ratings to the white and hispanic guy, and 5/5 for their lazy black coworkers. The supervisor is black and all the blacks (except one, but you can leave that out if you want) just sit around not working all day, so obviously the ratings were because of racial favoritism. There is a white sub-supervisor who sheepishly explains to the two workers they didn't get a good review because "they are new (had been there over 6 months by that point) and the supervisor didn't want to give them good ratings which would make them look bad if they didn't live up to in the future." (Yes, actually happened to me.) The hispanic guy then goes "fuck it" and becomes lazy while the white guy buckles down and keeps doing his job well for years, incurring lots of stress and being denigrated by lazy coworkers. (Yes. Me again.)

About the "diverse" cast. Have the main character travel for work or something to all-white places (rural Colorado, Boise of a few years ago, Italy, or wherever it doesn't matter.) While there he subconsciously relaxes. He enjoys safe walks at night by a river. He enjoys polite talks with strangers. After a few trips over several months/years, he realizes the racial and cultural connections between all the things I've included in this post and "wakes up."

Good luck on your story. I hope some of this helped. Will I be able to read your story somewhere?
Coronelington on scored.co
1 year ago 1 point (+0 / -0 / +1Score on mirror ) 1 child
will you be able to read my story anywhere? probably not anywhere except niche forums like this one, since this would get it banned for racism almost everywhere. it's a bit of redesigning an existing character and giving it a much more meaningful role than someone whose sole purpose is to hunt down a serial murderer who dies in a fire together with him in an act of revenge. honestly kinda faggy shit to effectively commit suicide, so i wanted to give it a bit of a glowup, where he does something far more useful as well both before and after that. that would be a reason for leaving the state: receiving hints about the murderer's last known place where he was seen
BlippiIsAPedo on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 )
Make sure the park gets worse and worse and show how the average White person actually cleaned up
BlippiIsAPedo on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 )
Replace minorities with red heads and it will be ok and pass
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