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a random white american moves to california to work, has no racism or noticing at first but gradually notices how his co-workers get fired for absurd reasons and frequently replaced by non whites who act savagely and redpills the main character who eventually either gets fired or moves away again. and yes, the ceo is a kike with awful people running the job interviews.

don't really have much else planned at the moment but there will be a neat line of developing this as it goes along.

thoughts?
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Rebooted on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 ) 1 child
Pretty close to my story. I'd add a few scenes where multiple white neighbors move away to "be with family", "get closer to our church", or don't state any reason at all. Over the course of a few years, he sees the families in the park down the street go from young and white with a smattering of mix of black/hispanic... then suddenly shift to mostly muslim. (Actually happened to my neighborhood park a couple years ago during one of the "refugee" resettlement actions. Blacks and hispanics immediately stopped coming around. Some whites still go because it is in our neighborhood.)

You can include a scene where two mothers were trying to fly a kite in the park with their young daughters (6-7 years old). They get surrounded and harrassed by young muslim boys (maybe 10-13 years old) as they try to badger the mothers to give up the kite. (Actually happened to my wife and daughter with their friends.)

Also a scene where a muslim woman approaches a man and his wife asking for directions or something. The man kindly responds and the muslim starts shaking in fear, refusing to look at him or acknowledge his response. (Again, actually happened to me. Twice. They probably got beaten for having a man talk to them.)

If you want actual work related things: (Yes, there is a theme you probably noticed, we start from an already "diverse" cast. More on that later.) Guy and his hispanic coworker are working hard on projects and kicking ass. Work review time comes along and the black supervisor gives 3/5 ratings to the white and hispanic guy, and 5/5 for their lazy black coworkers. The supervisor is black and all the blacks (except one, but you can leave that out if you want) just sit around not working all day, so obviously the ratings were because of racial favoritism. There is a white sub-supervisor who sheepishly explains to the two workers they didn't get a good review because "they are new (had been there over 6 months by that point) and the supervisor didn't want to give them good ratings which would make them look bad if they didn't live up to in the future." (Yes, actually happened to me.) The hispanic guy then goes "fuck it" and becomes lazy while the white guy buckles down and keeps doing his job well for years, incurring lots of stress and being denigrated by lazy coworkers. (Yes. Me again.)

About the "diverse" cast. Have the main character travel for work or something to all-white places (rural Colorado, Boise of a few years ago, Italy, or wherever it doesn't matter.) While there he subconsciously relaxes. He enjoys safe walks at night by a river. He enjoys polite talks with strangers. After a few trips over several months/years, he realizes the racial and cultural connections between all the things I've included in this post and "wakes up."

Good luck on your story. I hope some of this helped. Will I be able to read your story somewhere?
Coronelington on scored.co
1 year ago 1 point (+0 / -0 / +1Score on mirror ) 1 child
will you be able to read my story anywhere? probably not anywhere except niche forums like this one, since this would get it banned for racism almost everywhere. it's a bit of redesigning an existing character and giving it a much more meaningful role than someone whose sole purpose is to hunt down a serial murderer who dies in a fire together with him in an act of revenge. honestly kinda faggy shit to effectively commit suicide, so i wanted to give it a bit of a glowup, where he does something far more useful as well both before and after that. that would be a reason for leaving the state: receiving hints about the murderer's last known place where he was seen
BlippiIsAPedo on scored.co
1 year ago 0 points (+0 / -0 )
Make sure the park gets worse and worse and show how the average White person actually cleaned up
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